tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8113039007643369603.post904692919633709467..comments2024-01-06T23:42:50.856-08:00Comments on Writers' Rest: Lesson #1: Writing Via Dwight SwainMolly Noble Bullhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08811325552308982572noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8113039007643369603.post-61107302994256275872008-02-10T22:00:00.000-08:002008-02-10T22:00:00.000-08:00Roxanne, Your answers were great and so was your w...Roxanne, <BR/>Your answers were great and so was your writing. You got all the answers right. <BR/>I hope you, Anonymous and gobs more people will show for class on Wednesday for Lesson #2. <BR/>See you in class. <BR/>Love, <BR/>Molly <BR/>www.mollynoblebull.comAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8113039007643369603.post-68486246425933708502008-02-10T19:23:00.000-08:002008-02-10T19:23:00.000-08:001st hook- strong because there is an immediate lif...1st hook- strong because there is an immediate life and death drama- but based on your definition - " a story isn't about anything. a story is someone's reaction to what happens." So his reaction to her jump, is really what we are going to read on to find out...and then her reaction to whatever he does...and so on.<BR/><BR/>2nd hook- same thing. How will Sally react to be told she is a lier? <BR/><BR/>3rd hook- No people. Nothing has happened, and there isn't anybody to react to anything either.<BR/><BR/>How could the 3rd hook be made stronger? How about, To the east, the sun pushed its way from behind the rocky mountain, splattering the man hanging from the old oak tree by a noose with orange paint. A chilling wind whistled down the valley below, but the man was past noticing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8113039007643369603.post-59459505544191121602008-02-07T12:03:00.000-08:002008-02-07T12:03:00.000-08:00Good job, Anonymous, you got every answer right. B...Good job, Anonymous, you got every answer right. But to those who haven't written yet, I would like more feedback regarding hook # 3. <BR/>New Question: <BR/>How could hook # 3 become stronger? What would need to be added to make it a stronger hook? <BR/>Love. <BR/>Molly <BR/>www.mollynoblebull.comAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8113039007643369603.post-86090110616671702052008-02-07T10:35:00.000-08:002008-02-07T10:35:00.000-08:001st hook - Strong because it wants me to keep read...1st hook - Strong because it wants me to keep reading more. I want to know what happened when she hit the water. Did she live? Was she rescued? How did the man respond? Was he grief stricken? Relieved? Why did she jump?<BR/><BR/>2nd hook - strong because I want to know what the conflict was about. Did she really lie? About what? Was it necessary? Was he trying to help or was he abusive?<BR/><BR/>3rd hook - weak because there is no anticipated problem. It did not make me curious about anything.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com